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When writing fiction it needs to be believable. http://www.writewell.silverpen.org/2013/11/11/believability-in-fiction/ I can believe a few things, but this yells constantly that you didn’t do your research.
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Well i can say i like the story lol and i think yeah I think this girl is right to fight for her peer’s lol i mean somethings should be a choice of the individual not some government mandate lol nice start keep it going
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Why necrobump this? The OP got mad and left after this exchange and never returned. Thus the trainwreck of a story never got a chaper 2.
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Well, I’m all for rounding off and using fuzzy numbers, but I think December 7th (“A date that shall live in infamy.”) should be placed in 1941. Oh, and it’s “inaccuracies”.
[/teacher] ;D
I don’t know if trainwreck is the way I’d describe it, but then again, I didn’t read the whole thing. The first paragraph just made me go “OK, let’s look at the layout first.” And that was a mistake on my part. The way the dialogue was written (and I’m not even dealing with the actual content of the dialogue here, just the way it’s presented, like a cross between a script and story) makes me go nuts.
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I enjoyed this thread just for the sheer rage exhibited by the author. I don’t know if that was worth bumping it; I didn’t read the story because it is neither in script format nor prose format. I’m not reading some crazy amalgam of the two; pick your format. No arguing formats aren’t necessary, that’s like saying that my smashing my face against a keyboard is equally valid to someone writing an actual language. Bad prose, I can stand; no format, I cannot stand.
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Actually, it wasn’t too poorly written. It was just poorly researched.
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I disagree. It wasn’t a properly formatted script nor was it properly formatting prose. Perhaps it’s not the usual errors a new writer makes, but not having a recognizable format, in my opinion, makes it badly written.
when you will update this story?
Never. The author rage quit years ago and never returned.
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