Re: Aaron’s Life: Part 1

Oh my… You need to space your paragraphs better, I could not finish this story (or any story) if I have to read between paragraphs the size of my screen. Your first step to improvement is fixing your format (i.e. hitting enter more often).

Re: Aaron’s Life: Part 1

I agree with poster above me since I also stop reading it because text was so small and seem like huge wall text.

Also I don’t see any actual dialog in it(To me it don’t count if don’t see quote around what person speaking and dialog in own paragraph every time happens) .