Baby part 2

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If you have read part one you know how my started. I am now 14 in years. I am out of baby clothes and living a normal life.
But I still have to wear nappies and plastic pants daily and at night. Mum still changes and wont allow me to change myself. I am still punished for wet or dirty nappies.
My day start at 6.00am on a school day. Mum comes in my room and orders me out of bed, she pulls down my pyjmas and tells me to bend over while checks my bum then pulls down my plastic pants and removes the normally wet nappy. I am washed and put into a a disposable nappy and a pair of plastic pants for school. Then stood in the corner for 20 mins for wetting. Then in to the laundry room to wash my dirty nappies and baby pants. After breakfast Mum checks my nappy before I leave for school which is just across the road. At lunch time I return home for lunch and nappy change. Once home from school I am changed again but back into cloth nappy and plastic pants. Then home work. After home work I am allowed out to see the other kids. But I have go home every hour for a nappy check, if I dont Mum comes out and calls me then changes me on the door step infront of everyone which is my punishment for disobeying. Coming in time is 7.00pm for dinner and nappy change. Then into the laundry room again to wash any more nappies. then at 9pm it is up to my room to undress then Mum comes in and removes my plastic pants and nappy, then gives me a good hiding with her slipper thats for being baby I am told. I am then pinned into two cloth nappies and a clean pair of plastic pants. When Mum goes to bed she comes in and checks and changes me. This is a school day for me.
Weekends start at 8am with a nappy changes being stood on the corner then breakfast. Then washing in the laundry room.

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Oh brother. I thought we were done with this retarded “story”.

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Hmmm……a rehash may be in order.

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I stand by my earlier statement.

Really dude? Really?

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Here’s the story that Jaclyn wanted to videotape himself reading. It might actually be worse than Butter’s story The Poop That Took a Pee read by Morgan Freeman. (See Jaclyn’s South Park reference.)

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THAT………is actually a really funny idea. I tried reading a little bit of it using Morgan Freeman’s voice (in my head of course) and couldn’t stop laughing! Friggin hilarious!!!

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I was imagining Morgan Freeman reading it, not Jaclyn. I wasn’t trying to reopen THAT can of worms.

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At this stage in your development as a writer, I have to question whether or not there’s anything on earth that can help you improve your abilities – even writing with both hands. There are no characters in this story, there is no plot, there’s no conflict – in fact, there really is no story whatsoever. These things are never forgivable, but many other writers manage some degree of mitigation by pumping their stories with enough detail to make them worthy enough to become fap-fodder. You didn’t even do that. There isn’t an iota of detail in anything you’ve written, and no amount of detail would save you. This submission is less than worthless. I feel like you should apologize to every reader who was unfortunate enough to waste a moment of their lives staring at your brain jizz. That’s right; I said it: brain jizz.

Sometimes it’s not a bad thing to consider a new hobby. You won’t see me on American Idol, and there’s no shame in just admitting that you suck and shouldn’t be doing this. There have to be areas of expertise that are more well-suited to a writer of your caliber.

Have you tried coloring books?

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I’m guessing he would have a hard time staying within the lines.

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I second that statement.

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It doesn’t really surprise me that someone would join here and post only this and nothing else. I see it all the time on FetLife; ads like ‘hi i lookin 4 mommie 2 babie me if u r a mommie pls message me’ with the OP having a completely empty profile. 9 times out of 10 they just joined FetLife and this was the first thing they did after joining a bunch of ABDL groups.

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Maybe we were a bit mean in the last couple posts. I am not saying the story is not terrible. I helped grade stories written by third graders that are better than this story, so I am assuming that English isn’t the OP’s native language. Or maybe it is the state of education in this country.

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To be typed it would have to have some form of structure would it not?

What the OP attempts to show as a story is more like an idea of what they want to do with a story… This cannot even be rated anywhere near FAP material. I have no clue as to what else to say besides this OP needs to Rewrite this whole attempt of a story, to include Characters, and a Plot.

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Here’s the sad thing about all this (to me).

I’ve seen this sort of writing before. Or rather, I’ve lived with people who this OP could be…. back 10 - 20 years ago, I shared a lot of rental houses with a lot of marginal people.

Guys who write like this have a few likely common attributes.

Of course, these are guesses, but I’d bet money that I’m right with half of these:

  • The OP has returned, probably, to look for responses to his post, but he hasn’t READ any of them. This type of person has such a lack of…. shall we say ‘inquisitive intelligence’ that they would only read a response that says “good more”. That’s all he’d understand. So, he’s not read any of your responses, or if he has, he’s not understood them.

  • The OP honestly thinks his writing is fine. He sees nothing deeply wrong with it. He may know it’s not ‘genius’ writing; he may admit that it wouldn’t sell a million copies, but he may very well think he ‘writes good’ and he’d not be surprised if somebody offered to pay him for a commission. Basal idiocy like this does not recognize it’s own failings, usually.

  • there is a very, very slight chance the OP is underage, but I sincerly doubt it. I’m imagining 30’s to 40’s.

  • Probably lonely, likely alcoholic (I’ve known a few hardcore drinkers who would type like this).

I could make other assumptions but the rest are even more disrespectful than the above, so I’ll stop here.

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Writing like this confuses me. The only time I’ve encountered this level of education was when I go to McDonald’s and try to explain how to get my correct change back.